I understand that part of the point of this narrative is to paint western history with the same 2-dimensional brush that has been used on non-western history. However, that does not mean it is unfair to criticize the narrative. My problem is that LaBas's story feels much more complex and thought out and complicated then the Atonist's version of history would be. The character's in LaBas' story are 2-D but the story is much more complex, so it doesn't feel incorrect to expect a more complicated analysis--especially when I feel like that analysis could make the Atonists even clearer as a threat.
The first thing that stuck out to me was the lumping of Moses and Judaism in with Atonism and Christianity. It has been fairly well established that Christianity is a product of Atonist interference, at least it's spreading throughout the world. However, the book, for the most part, neglects to discuss how Judaism and Islam fit into this narrative. Only at the end do we get the lumping of Moses with the Atonists. We have his adoptive mother as an Atonist, believing in the brilliance of all things Greek and Western. This doesn't make sense to me, because the Jews were slaves, to the Atonists in power--namely Moses' adoptive family--they were not the people in power, and it doesn't make sense that the Atonists can be both Moses' parents (in power) and the people that Moses freed from those people. Not to mention, that the Atonists are hinted at being the causes of the World Wars, the second of which involved Hitler (perhaps the most extreme Atonist of the 20th Century) trying to kill all the Jews even though they are apparently also Atonist. And if you want to take the argument that Judaism leads to Christianity and that's the link, then one must realize that Islam also stems from the monotheistic traditions that start up in Judaism. However, Islam is definitely not Atonists, because the Crusades were waged by Christian Atonists.
The problem for me is that the lack of clarity about those two groups weakens what is an otherwise very powerful understanding of the meta-war between Western and African culture. The Atonists are always in the background erasing and destroying and undermining Jes Grew, but if we can't understand who the Atonists really are and what to think about the other monotheistic religions linked to Christianity, then we can't understand our own Atonist biases with as much complexity.
DISCLAIMER: I thought the section was fascinating, and I really enjoyed reading all the stuff about Moses and the rewriting of that history. It just struck me as something that, on the one hand, was 2-dimensional and therefore poignant in that way, but on the other hand it's 2-dimensionality undermined a different point Reed was trying to make. I wish the book had taken the time to figure out where they fit in, and to discuss them. (For all the mentions of the crusades and Mutafikah, Islam is not talked about much, and definitely not much in terms of this metanarrative).
Apologies if that was unclear. I wanted to get the thoughts out there.